Essay checking

[Yousuf Ykr]

It is very hard to mark yourself in SAT especially for essay. So I make this thread so that ppl can post essay and others might rate the essay....

 

[Yousuf Ykr]

Here is my essay.... If any one can help?

 

[maryamshake94]

hey.
great essay, loved the examples you put in there. yet, what i felt was that there was a lot going on about how those amazing personalities went through disappointment but were still able to strike back. the question also asks whether there is a limit to failure and when should a person give up the attempts at success. i'm afraid i didn't notice any points in relation to that issue. maybe you need to put something in there in accordance to this one topic, and make a distinction between what you have already written and what new you're going to put in there.

 

[Yousuf Ykr]

hey.
great essay, loved the examples you put in there. yet, what i felt was that there was a lot going on about how those amazing personalities went through disappointment but were still able to strike back. the question also asks whether there is a limit to failure and when should a person give up the attempts at success. i'm afraid i didn't notice any points in relation to that issue. maybe you need to put something in there in accordance to this one topic, and make a distinction between what you have already written and what new you're going to put in there.

Assalamwalaikum
Thank you very much for the review. Hopefully I will try to fix that in the future. But I noticed that it is sometimes hard to go exactly by the topic and more over we dont get that much time to plan all of it beforehand. So any suggestion for that?

 

[maryamshake94]

Assalamwalaikum
Thank you very much for the review. Hopefully I will try to fix that in the future. But I noticed that it is sometimes hard to go exactly by the topic and more over we dont get that much time to plan all of it beforehand. So any suggestion for that?

wa alikum masalam.
you're welcome. the fact i could gather from your writing was this one: you saw one topic and immediately you started planning and sorting out what would be the best points for it..while not paying much attention to the other issue at hand. i'm a Business Studies student, so i have had a lot of writing practice. and what i've learnt is that you absolutely can't just focus a single matter. i would suggest these: first time you read a question, it usually sails over your head, right? so reading it again would let you understand what it is they're asking. read it for a third time, and when you do so, make up points on ALL the topics that are being asked. write them done roughly, that is best. once you're done thinking of the possible facts about EACH and EVERY matter asked, plan up the format of your essay. once its all done and planned in your head and on the rough sheet..its easier to start writing it and its also less time consuming. hope this helped.

 

[Yousuf Ykr]

wa alikum masalam.
you're welcome. the fact i could gather from your writing was this one: you saw one topic and immediately you started planning and sorting out what would be the best points for it..while not paying much attention to the other issue at hand. i'm a Business Studies student, so i have had a lot of writing practice. and what i've learnt is that you absolutely can't just focus a single matter. i would suggest these: first time you read a question, it usually sails over your head, right? so reading it again would let you understand what it is they're asking. read it for a third time, and when you do so, make up points on ALL the topics that are being asked. write them done roughly, that is best. once you're done thinking of the possible facts about EACH and EVERY matter asked, plan up the format of your essay. once its all done and planned in your head and on the rough sheet..its easier to start writing it and its also less time consuming. hope this helped.

Thank you so much.... It really helps

 

[maryamshake94]

Thank you so much.... It really helps

you're welcome!

 

[maryamshake94]

hey guys!
this is my first written essay. can you please go through it and score it for me if possible? oh and please do tell me if you think its too basic.
thanks!

 

[rideronthestorm]

hey guys!
this is my first written essay. can you please go through it and score it for me if possible? oh and please do tell me if you think its too basic.
thanks!

http://talk.collegeconfidential.com/sat-preparation/

 

[rideronthestorm]

bari nai gal kitti ae ?

 

[maryamshake94]

bari nai gal kitti ae ?

ni, choti c tou hai. only three lines worth of gal.