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Hello, i have written an essay based on one of the topics my teacher has given me. can someone rate this essay out of 30 and also mention any mistakes i have made. the topic is ''The Future of Pakistan''.
The future of Pakistan seems to be getting bleaker and bleaker by the day. With a crippling economy, a negative balance of payment, constant security threats from various terrorist organizations and an unacceptably high rate of illiteracy, it seems that the country is spiraling to the “dark ages”.
A survey was held by the Institute of European Business Administration from 125 countries and Pakistan was ranked 4th most intelligent people of the world. Then why does Pakistan have a literacy rate of estimated 50%? Illiteracy is the root cause of almost every problem today. It increases poverty due to less employment and also decreases the educational facilities due to lack of teachers and educated people. On the whole, because of illiteracy we are left behind in every aspect, economically, politically or educationally. It also causes criminal activities as due to less awareness and education, people get involved in street crimes and various other criminal activities to keep up their living and necessities of life. Like this, illiteracy is the root of many other problems in this country. If the government takes action such as the introduction of education awareness schemes or building of more schools with affordable tuition fees, then a considerable drop in the illiteracy rate can be seen.
Basically the balance of payment is the difference between the value of exports of a country and the value of imports of a country. For Pakistan, the current balance of payment represents a negative figure, which elucidates the fact that the value of Pakistan's imports is much greater than the value of Pakistan's exports. A very strong reason for this negative figure is the need for strengthening the industrial sector of Pakistan for which the import of capital goods is required, which forms a large part of Pakistan's exports. Another reason for this negative balance of payment is the fact that Pakistani goods do not have a very high demand in the market because of the lack of standardization in their products as well as the absence of quality control. Another source that increases the imports is the mindset of the public, which prefers imported goods to local goods. Lastly, it is the constant increase in oil prices that has led to the huge deficit in the balance of payment in Pakistan. The import problem can easily be solved by using the natural gas reserves here in Pakistan which is estimated to be over 492 billion cubic meters or by setting up more Export Processing Zones all over Pakistan.
The constant security threats are also a major problem faced by Pakistan. It has especially affected the tourism industry in Pakistan.The countries or regions that depend heavily on tourism have been found to suffer significant economic losses due to the persistence of terrorism. That is because individuals who plan their holidays are not likely to choose a destination with a high threat of terrorist attacks. Gilgit-Baltistan and the NWFP are important destinations in Pakistan and people living there depend on tourism. However, most parts of Pakistan’s northern belt and NWFP have fallen into the terrorists’ grip. According to the World Economic Forum, Pakistan ranked 113 out of 130 countries in 2009 as a tourist destination. The low ranking is attributed to incidents of terrorism and the lack of a tourism regulatory framework in Pakistan. The tourism industry will surely be bankrupt soon unless action is taken against these terrorist organizations.
In conclusion, unless the government takes action immediately against these problems the country is facing, Pakistan will surely enter a dark age with pandemonium all over the country.
Hello, i have written an essay based on one of the topics my teacher has given me. can someone rate this essay out of 30 and also mention any mistakes i have made. the topic is ''The Future of Pakistan''.
The future of Pakistan seems to be getting bleaker and bleaker by the day. With a crippling economy, a negative balance of payment, constant security threats from various terrorist organizations and an unacceptably high rate of illiteracy, it seems that the country is spiraling to the “dark ages”.
A survey was held by the Institute of European Business Administration from 125 countries and Pakistan was ranked 4th most intelligent people of the world. Then why does Pakistan have a literacy rate of estimated 50%? Illiteracy is the root cause of almost every problem today. It increases poverty due to less employment and also decreases the educational facilities due to lack of teachers and educated people. On the whole, because of illiteracy we are left behind in every aspect, economically, politically or educationally. It also causes criminal activities as due to less awareness and education, people get involved in street crimes and various other criminal activities to keep up their living and necessities of life. Like this, illiteracy is the root of many other problems in this country. If the government takes action such as the introduction of education awareness schemes or building of more schools with affordable tuition fees, then a considerable drop in the illiteracy rate can be seen.
Basically the balance of payment is the difference between the value of exports of a country and the value of imports of a country. For Pakistan, the current balance of payment represents a negative figure, which elucidates the fact that the value of Pakistan's imports is much greater than the value of Pakistan's exports. A very strong reason for this negative figure is the need for strengthening the industrial sector of Pakistan for which the import of capital goods is required, which forms a large part of Pakistan's exports. Another reason for this negative balance of payment is the fact that Pakistani goods do not have a very high demand in the market because of the lack of standardization in their products as well as the absence of quality control. Another source that increases the imports is the mindset of the public, which prefers imported goods to local goods. Lastly, it is the constant increase in oil prices that has led to the huge deficit in the balance of payment in Pakistan. The import problem can easily be solved by using the natural gas reserves here in Pakistan which is estimated to be over 492 billion cubic meters or by setting up more Export Processing Zones all over Pakistan.
The constant security threats are also a major problem faced by Pakistan. It has especially affected the tourism industry in Pakistan.The countries or regions that depend heavily on tourism have been found to suffer significant economic losses due to the persistence of terrorism. That is because individuals who plan their holidays are not likely to choose a destination with a high threat of terrorist attacks. Gilgit-Baltistan and the NWFP are important destinations in Pakistan and people living there depend on tourism. However, most parts of Pakistan’s northern belt and NWFP have fallen into the terrorists’ grip. According to the World Economic Forum, Pakistan ranked 113 out of 130 countries in 2009 as a tourist destination. The low ranking is attributed to incidents of terrorism and the lack of a tourism regulatory framework in Pakistan. The tourism industry will surely be bankrupt soon unless action is taken against these terrorist organizations.
In conclusion, unless the government takes action immediately against these problems the country is facing, Pakistan will surely enter a dark age with pandemonium all over the country.
