Wattpad novel 'The Other World'

[bakhita]

So I just published a new novel 'The Other World' I want feedback. Please, read, comment and vote! and let me know of my deficiencies of efficiencies if any!

 

[amerfarooq]

It would help if you include the link to the novel.

 

[bakhita]

It would help if you include the link to the novel.

oof course, that's encouraging for me!
https://www.wattpad.com/myworks/48412323-the-other-world