- Messages
- 82
- Reaction score
- 62
- Points
- 28
+ agree with saad"air Bourne’s", B capital for no appropriate reason.
"Goosebumps", why is the G capital. -_-
"Silky".
"Same occurred with me," - Use a semicolon here instead of the comma.
Sentences are too long. Shorten up some of them to emphasize importance (short sentences = important points).
"Dominating the sky, fearless,"
Changing it, "Dominating the skies fearlessly - now, who wouldn't want that?"
"or me against it." - Not required. The sentence should be completed at "by my side".
Hope that helps!