Yes .
Firstly There should be a proper title which will make sense and appeal and mostly astonish the reader and it will pull the reader to read the article.
Secondly İ guess but dont know exactly the first sentence should be an interesting one and also the first paraghraph is importent then go on writing with combining the paragraphs perfectly which means you should not cut the paragrapg in the middle of topic like that and you should also ask one more person to make it authenticate.
Firstly There should be a proper title which will make sense and appeal and mostly astonish the reader and it will pull the reader to read the article.
Secondly İ guess but dont know exactly the first sentence should be an interesting one and also the first paraghraph is importent then go on writing with combining the paragraphs perfectly which means you should not cut the paragrapg in the middle of topic like that and you should also ask one more person to make it authenticate.