Free editor required :P

[Faizan Muhammmad]

you all are crazy!! Sister Rutzaba, May I be of any assistance here?

Same here

 

[Rutzaba]

sure sure will make a summary the entire story and give it to u before u read it

 

[Faizan Muhammmad]

sure sure will make a summary the entire story and give it to u before u read it

waiting....

 

[khunshaw]

Free editor required

I read you first story.. and you have a nice style of writing it's similar to mine, My teacher started calling me a physicotic killer as all my stories had murders, ghosts and forests!!! my teacher and I even started writing a novel but it was left half way through!!
I'd like to be you editor, if you haven't picked anyone as yet or have a better choice available!!

Cheers...

 

[Rutzaba]

dude pprs going on... will have to w8
as for the editors the more the better

 

[khunshaw]

okay... I am free now a days!!

 

[Rutzaba]

okay... I am free now a days!!

 

[Rutzaba]

The name of the hero can ofc be changed
Valentino Santoni, an ordinary man in the terrorist organisation established in Corsica, France, finds his top three leaders to be assassinated by the French police.

The Flnc decides to strike back, and with Valentino as their leader convinces the Corsican civilians to stand up for independence.

But the Italian, to whom Corsica had once belonged, under the pretences of helping the Flnc takes over half the island. Valentino is suddenly on the run;

From the Corsicans: to whom he was a traitor.

From the French: to whom he was the cause of this mayhem

From the Italians: to whom he poses a lethal threat.

 

[Faizan Muhammmad]

The name of the hero can ofc be changed
Valentino Santoni, an ordinary man in the terrorist organisation established in Corsica, France, finds his top three leaders to be assassinated by the French police.

The Flnc decides to strike back, and with Valentino as their leader convinces the Corsican civilians to stand up for independence.

But the Italian, to whom Corsica had once belonged, under the pretences of helping the Flnc takes over half the island. Valentino is suddenly on the run;

From the Corsicans: to whom he was a traitor.

From the French: to whom he was the cause of this mayhem

From the Italians: to whom he poses a lethal threat.

I assume flnc is the terrorist organisation
and the terrorist cum freedom fighters angle is a bit confusing though, our hero is a good guy so why not skip the terrorist thingy
how did he become a traitor, he was helping corsicans ??

 

[Rutzaba]

I assume flnc is the terrorist organisation
and the terrorist cum freedom fighters angle is a bit confusing though, our hero is a good guy so why not skip the terrorist thingy
how did he become a traitor, he was helping corsicans ??

look
i intend to make a summary of the stry... no hero is not a good guy.
and the terrorist organisations are not fictional... they are true and really exst

 

[Rutzaba]

I assume flnc is the terrorist organisation
and the terrorist cum freedom fighters angle is a bit confusing though, our hero is a good guy so why not skip the terrorist thingy
how did he become a traitor, he was helping corsicans ??

see how abt this... an organisation that started for the sake of freedom where people gave funds freely to them... but then wen the people see that the objective is far fetched a bit impossible to reach and they see that people are not willing to give funds as they once were, so they try bank robberies and forcefully collecting revolutionary taxes?
terrorist organisation is important as they are rebeles to the french govt

 

[Rutzaba]

My novel all in all is about an island named Corsica… situated between France and Italy, the island has a history of being dominated and crushed under different rules. The birth place of Napoleon has been subject to great injustices and have ever longed for independence. Holding a population of only 302000, and their major source of revenue being tourism, the idea of independence do seem farfetched, but history tell us that in 1729 the island did actually gain independence under the rule of General Pasquale Paoli though it lasted for around fifteen years only. The island was then taken over, and still is a part of France.

 

[Rutzaba]

A major thing that we need to undestand ios the culture of that place... u can safely say that its sort of godfather inspired culture with lesser brains and more amunition... they can kill and kill freely just for things as small as parking lot.
With napolean and pasquale paopli being ther hero the children are taught war tactics from their childhood

 

[Faizan Muhammmad]

see how abt this... an organisation that started for the sake of freedom where people gave funds freely to them... but then wen the people see that the objective is far fetched a bit impossible to reach and they see that people are not willing to give funds as they once were, so they try bank robberies and forcefully collecting revolutionary taxes?
terrorist organisation is important as they are rebeles to the french govt

this looks much better

 

[Rutzaba]

The flnc did in fact came for independence then it split into three parts. one of them resigned... the part a thought that everything was ok in the name of independence and started shooting n killing all tat came in the way of them even tourists from france and policemen... the part b were a touch more merciful and decided that only the bulidings shud b destroyed and people shouldnt be harmed...
at one point the clashes btw the 2 became so many that they started fighting among themselves killing freely members of each other ( all facts) then in 2000 the two joined hands reached a reconciliation and refocused the faces of their guns towards the french, the long forgotten enemy.

 

[Rutzaba]

so the hero 37 years old works for flnc part b and after the merger is required to report to new boss or rather bosses... who r cruel and he doesnt trust them... first he panics on the sort of treatment they give him but he later realizes that they are only testing him.. after he finally accepts to work with them (still no trust) and they are only warming up fr the challenge the french receives intelligence that the flnc is now reunited and three of the leaders of the flnc get assassinated.

 

[Rutzaba]

Under the pressure of the lost leaders the leaders that remain behind decide to go on the plan their ancestors had originally planned and urge the hero to start a revolution under his great but hidden skills. without preparation they start a revolution that starts to be a success owing to the leadership qualities of the hero. The Italians after negotiations plan to help the Corsican and provide help in forms of ammunition and manpower not to mention money. together they drive out the french of half the corsica...

 

[Muhammad TAimoor]

Gimme some time

 

[Rutzaba]

when the french retreat and the corsicans ask the italian troops to retreat and give the corsicans bak the promised corsica... they refuse saying that they have no intention of giving bak the isle to corsica and they have taken revenge against the french who had long ago snatched corsica from their possession. they also order the hero to be killed at sight as he has the power to influence the minds of the corsicans against italians as they did with te french... and thus the hero runs away

 

[Rutzaba]

i think i lost my editors @Faizan Muhammmad @khunshaw