Poetry! =P

[Z.A.M]

I hope im not going off-topic
A question to the experts Epiphany and others..
Im working on a poem and i was wondering if using long sentences makes the poem appear a pit inappropriate?

 

[Epiphany]

I hope im not going off-topic
A question to the experts Epiphany and others..
Im working on a poem and i was wondering if using long sentences makes the poem appear a pit inappropriate?

And how exactly inappropriate?

 

[Z.A.M]

And how exactly inappropriate?

Well, Mr.Epiphany I meant it does appear nice while reading cause some one suggested to make my sentences as concise as possible while writing a poem.
Thank you for addressing my question

 

[Epiphany]

Well, Mr.Epiphany I meant it does appear nice while reading cause some one suggested to make my sentences as concise as possible while writing a poem.
Thank you for addressing my question

I don't think that is, by any means, inappropriate. As long as the words used keeps the writing interesting, go for it. Regarding making it as concise as possible; I couldn't help laughing out loud. No offence. =)

 

[whitetiger64]

hey i wrote dis a while bak but i wasnt sure whether i shud put it up or not......

My love for you was as tough as leather
Yours for me was as light as a feather
Through thick and thin, the leather stood fast
But with a mere breath, the feather flew past

My love for you was like a rock: unbreakable
Yours was like that floating icicle
So when times passed and things changed
You disappeared whilst I remained

My love for you was like the sun
Ever there, even through rains and storms done
But yours was like that passing breeze
Flitting and occasional, difficult to seize

Whilst my love is in my heart
Sturdy and strong; never apart
Yours comes of in words, just rolling
Shallow and worthless, like autumn leaves falling....

 

[Z.A.M]

Eternal Abode​

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I shall tell you a tale yet untold​

So listen carefully and see how it shall unfold​

Friend and foes​

Here it goes,​

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Being a pirates lad​

The sea was the only legacy i had​

Yet it wasnt merely legacy​

It was my mother who showered me with love and intimacy​

Like a father who held me strong​

A teacher who taught me to differentiate between right and wrong​

Provided a friend's shoulder to weep​

But one day while i stole the privilege of sleep,​

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Sound of thuder jolted me awake​

I knew my life was at stake​

An alien sea met my eyes​

Waves rocked the ship dangeroously​

It didnt cease despite my cries​

Just when death had me in hand​

A wave of mercy washed me to land​

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It was a perfect dwelling place​

Provided sustenance and plenty of space​

I needn't to flea​

For i trusted it more than the sea​

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One day however,​

the land gave a tremor​

I knew something wasnt right​

My whole body prepared to flight​

Just when i thought i could survive​

death was quicker to arrive​

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Death took me to it's lair​

I knew i had found my eternal abode here​

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[whitetiger64]

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OMG! It's reeeallly awesome buddy!! i luv it!!!

 

[Z.A.M]

OMG! It's reeeallly awesome buddy!! i luv it!!!

Thanx mate i wrote it ! I actually wrote a poem after quite a long time so i think my skills are bit tarnished but atleast i managed to produce sumthn

 

[Epiphany]

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Nice one. Keep writing. =)

 

[Z.A.M]

Nice one. Keep writing. =)

Thanks Epiphany ! Will do Sir! Keep on the lookout then!

 

[Samster]

Here is a poem that I made myself

Incubus

I come with the night
When darkness takes the light
With wings I fly
With eyes I spy

Fingers sharp as claws
Fangs for my jaws
I possess the face of fear
your death comes to a near

A woman I shall deceive
A Child I shall receive
Carrying the evil seed
Your soul is what I feed

hell is born in your womb
This world shall meet it's doom
This is destruction
according to instruction

 

[paradoX error]

Aadat Mujhay Andheron Se Darne Ki Daal Kr,
Aik Shakhs Meri Zindagii Ko Raat Kar Gaya…

 

[paradoX error]

Kuch bol kar samjhana mujhay nahi aata,
Meri har raah tuj tak jati hay,
Par raah khoj kar chalna mujhay nahi aata,
Teri har baat sar-mathay par,
Par tujhay bhool jana mujhay nahi aata......

 

[aaaamfa]

Kuch bol kar samjhana mujhay nahi aata,
Meri har raah tuj tak jati hay,
Par raah khoj kar chalna mujhay nahi aata,
Teri har baat sar-mathay par,
Par tujhay bhool jana mujhay nahi aata......

u r good at poetry wah wah wah

 

[aaaamfa]

Wo nafrat bhi kartay hain pyar k liyay,
Wo inkaar bhi kartay hain iqrar k liyay,
Ajeeb hotay hai yeh ishq karne waalay,
Aankhain bhi band kartay hain to sirf deedaar k liyay

lagta hai aap bhi pyaa karney lagey hain

 

[aaaamfa]

Suno Acha Nahin Lagta
Kare Jab Tazkara Koi
Kare Jab Tabsara Koi
Tumhari Zaat Ko Khoojay
Tumhari Baat Ko Soochay
…Mujhay Acha Nahin Lagta
Suno Acha Nahin Lagta
Tumhari Muskurahat Per
Hazaroon Loag Martay Hoon
Tumhari Aik Aahat Par
Hazaroon Dil Dharaktay Hoon
Kise Ka Tum Pe Yuun Marna
Mujhay Acha Nahin Lagta..

bilkul sahii baat

 

[agha saad]

POETRY <3

 

[étudiante]

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Class stuff Loved it

 

[étudiante]

My true dream

Can a true dream be such that
I can but give it a kiss
For a second in the hour of Life?
Think Irum think! Can this be it?
Think again you insolent miss!
Does the beep of the detector (archeologist)
Or the sweet smell of the ester (combinatorial chemist)
Really please you so?
Is the weaving of images
With feelings, (poet) and bringing heart fro (pscychologist)
What you want to put on the eternal Show? (Day of Judgement)

Nay! What you wanted is indeed
To splash in the blessed Fountain, (Fountain of Kauser)
To caress in rose baths the feet
Of the Princess you want to be. (Hadhrat Fathimah RA)
Ah! The Thursday morning you long
Not for the pretty thongs (Hur)
But to tighten the tight cord
For you will see the Face of your Lord.
Oh for that bed of roses you visualize
Where you can lie on, no one to criticize!
And the dream castle studded with jewels
Like roses on a rose-bush.

Yes that is the true dream
That lasts for an eternity
Imagine – your heart will scream
With delight, with a displaced fright
That I’ve been watching a mirage!
And my loved ones a glance away
For me to see everyday.
Now I see it more each day
‘Tis the way I want to stay.


The red part is just explanation AND don;t laugh at my wild worldly dreams JK I laugh at em too

 

[agha saad]

My true dream

Can a true dream be such that
I can but give it a kiss
For a second in the hour of Life?
Think Irum think! Can this be it?
Think again you insolent miss!
Does the beep of the detector (archeologist)
Or the sweet smell of the ester (combinatorial chemist)
Really please you so?
Is the weaving of images
With feelings, (poet) and bringing heart fro (pscychologist)
What you want to put on the eternal Show? (Day of Judgement)

Nay! What you wanted is indeed
To splash in the blessed Fountain, (Fountain of Kauser)
To caress in rose baths the feet
Of the Princess you want to be. (Hadhrat Fathimah RA)
Ah! The Thursday morning you long
Not for the pretty thongs (Hur)
But to tighten the tight cord
For you will see the Face of your Lord.
Oh for that bed of roses you visualize
Where you can lie on, no one to criticize!
And the dream castle studded with jewels
Like roses on a rose-bush.

Yes that is the true dream
That lasts for an eternity
Imagine – your heart will scream
With delight, with a displaced fright
That I’ve been watching a mirage!
And my loved ones a glance away
For me to see everyday.
Now I see it more each day
‘Tis the way I want to stay.


The red part is just explanation AND don;t laugh at my wild worldly dreams JK I laugh at em too

IS IT UR OWN MAKE??