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bravvvvaaaaaaa senorita!!!ok this is not related to anything above..i ve tried to write something n i need suggestions. Hows it?
She lingered on her fragile legs as she attempted to flee, a feeble attempt indeed. They would be behind her any time but she was running, running away from her life, her destiny. She wished she would shrink down into nothing. She cursed everything that had befallen her. The darkened sky above with patches of silvered clouds worsened her grievances. Was she destined to live such a life? A question that whirled in her mind every now. Suddenly she felt so relieved, as if there were no legs, the pain had fainted. She fell gracefully on the thorns and crumpled leaves beneath her, waiting for the angel of death to come, spread the wings of tenderness and take her to the land of peace, to lead her away from the world that was so cruel. The world that had nothing to give her but take everything from her.
For the last time, she could see the red glisten.
excellent vocabulary and a gripping writing style. The grammar is awsum. Excpt for a few small things say
In the 5 th line it shud b now n then* in the same line i think relieved cud have been replaced by a better more suitable word. Apart from that i think we have a writer among us! Thumbs up!