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[black widow]

sorry
busy nowadays
so cant write a story
btw. thankx for the tag

 

[Bilal Khan]

Raweeha shinnyyy ..
read my story and tell me , how is it ..

 

[Bilal Khan]

sorry
busy nowadays
so cant write a story
btw. thankx for the tag

Read my story above..

 

[shinnyyy]

Raweeha shinnyyy ..
read my story and tell me , how is it ..

which story :O

 

[Bilal Khan]

which story :O

Check the previous pages ..

 

[Raweeha]

Hmm, Bilal Khan, you've exaggerated an everyday situation to something very dramatic, was that intentional? Maybe that's how you see a child viewing it. Interesting. I like your choice of words. I can personally relate to losing the handbag as I've currently misplaced something very important myself! nonetheless keep writing, you'll improve with constructive feedback and time. Oh and. It's okay to use simple words sometimes

 

[Bilal Khan]

Hmm, Bilal Khan, you've exaggerated an everyday situation to something very dramatic, was that intentional? Maybe that's how you see a child viewing it. Interesting. I like your choice of words. I can personally relate to losing the handbag as I've currently misplaced something very important myself! nonetheless keep writing, you'll improve with constructive feedback and time. Oh and. It's okay to use simple words sometimes

yes , that was intentional.. from a 6 year kid's view , it seemed like this..
yeah , u are right also ..

 

[Bilal Khan]

fathimaash cyclone94

 

[Bilal Khan]

Tuba noor NaNinG Atiqa asl
read my story above please.

 

[Faizan Muhammmad]

hey what about urdu ???

 

[Bilal Khan]

IGCSE O/L student read my story above please. .

 

[Bilal Khan]

girl_with_a_dream Joeylicious =) Nini X hellz Angel aish nafu , read my story above. .
on the previous pages ..

 

[Joeylicious =)]

its good...keep up the good work

 

[Joeylicious =)]

its good...keep up the good work

 

[Nini X]

thnx 4 da tag 4rnd.. sure i'll read 'em!

 

[Bilal Khan]

Rmarie-yum

 

[Rmarie-yum]

I am scared of this thread Bilal Khan

 

[Bilal Khan]

I am scared of this thread Bilal Khan

Oh why ?

 

[hiyaraja]

hey pls read my story and tell me where I need to improve

 

[Maganius]

i also want to participate
last date?