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0510 English P21

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Ok. Some more questions i remembered :
Note-taking exercise :
What was costas firsts discoveries :
I wrote found water underground the fields of his village and a piece of metal
What advice gives to companies:
basic quality of water and its quantity and the depth of the water underground
What equipments are used now:
a twig or any piece of wood , a pendullum ( kind of a weight ) , and a rod .
You ?
ditto same :) :D
 
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Thanks for the responses fellows . Now, let's discuss a bit about the last essay , the one with the advantages and disadvantages of the car. We were supposed to write an article, so we had to put a title before writing the article? What title did you wrote? I wrote '' Ally or Foe ''? Is this an effective title , that is capable of giving me some points on the language part of the exercise ?
 
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Thanks for the responses fellows . Now, let's discuss a bit about the last essay , the one with the advantages and disadvantages of the car. We were supposed to write an article, so we had to put a title before writing the article? What title did you wrote? I wrote '' Ally or Foe ''? Is this an effective title , that is capable of giving me some points on the language part of the exercise ?
i didn't actually write a title.
I wrote an intoduction paragraph
then advantages paragraph
disadvantages paragraph
then conclusion (my opinion)
 
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I wrote an introduction talking about cars and the fact that both advantages and disadvantages can be derived by the way they are used.
Then two paragraphs expressing and justifying my opinion ( i claimed that it has more advantages than disadvantages )
And ended the essay with the conclusion. I ended the conclusion by saying '' So, what do you believe? Is your car a foe or an ally to you ?''
Is this a good format ?
 
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I wrote an introduction talking about cars and the fact that both advantages and disadvantages can be derived by the way they are used.
Then two paragraphs expressing and justifying my opinion ( i claimed that it has more advantages than disadvantages )
And ended the essay with the conclusion. I ended the conclusion by saying '' So, what do you believe? Is your car a foe or an ally to you ?''
Is this a good format ?
Yeah that's great, i mentioned air pollution as one of the disadvantages and i expanded this point, do i get only 1 mark for this point?
 
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Yeah that's great, i mentioned air pollution as one of the disadvantages and i expanded this point, do i get only 1 mark for this point?

I think you got much more that one point ( if you expanded it , around 5-7 points) and the other points will come from your other points. Air pollution is a very strong fact to use, and i believe that since air polution was not listed in the ''balloons'' on the previous page, you will get some credit as well for using your own and original idea. For example, did you say about carbon monoxide that is a very dangerous chemical being roeleased by the exhaust pipes of the cars and has the ability to replace oxygen in our body ( if you are doing biology or chemistry , you might know them beforehand), as well as carbon dioxide that contributes to the global warming, resulting in an increase in the temperature of the planet ? You could also talk about the cost of the fuels , which rise continously , or the cost of having insurance on your vehicle ? You agree ?(y)
 
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I think you got much more that one point ( if you expanded it , around 5-7 points) and the other points will come from your other points. Air pollution is a very strong fact to use, and i believe that since air polution was not listed in the ''balloons'' on the previous page, you will get some credit as well for using your own and original idea. For example, did you say about carbon monoxide that is a very dangerous chemical being roeleased by the exhaust pipes of the cars and has the ability to replace oxygen in our body ( if you are doing biology or chemistry , you might know them beforehand), as well as carbon dioxide that contributes to the global warming, resulting in an increase in the temperature of the planet ? You could also talk about the cost of the fuels , which rise continously , or the cost of having insurance on your vehicle ? You agree ?(y)
yeah i mentioned carbon monoxide that its toxic and nitrogen dioxide which can cause acid rains which kill plants and erode limestone buildings, i also said catalytic converters (which reduce air pollution caused by cars) are expensive. I also mentioned car accidents which result in an increase of death rate.. :p
 
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I personally started by linking it to the old time when camels were used for transportation in the introductory paragraph...Then went on comparing between the public transports and cars.. in the end i suggested the use of bicycles for students..I also mentioned the pollution point in the middle of the article and that cars have become a status symbol of today :)
How do u ppl judge my essay?
I wrote an introduction talking about cars and the fact that both advantages and disadvantages can be derived by the way they are used.
Then two paragraphs expressing and justifying my opinion ( i claimed that it has more advantages than disadvantages )
And ended the essay with the conclusion. I ended the conclusion by saying '' So, what do you believe? Is your car a foe or an ally to you ?''
Is this a good format ?
I would say it is pretty impressive pouloukos :D
 
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Title is very important in articles . From what I know , if you do not write a title , you usually get deducted 1 mark for the structure.
 
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Listen , the title itself gives you the mark . However , if you can make it more interesting to attract the audience , it might be the difference between an Α+ and an A or an A and a B+ . If you wrote not with capitals , I think you were effective in acquiring 2/2
 
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